Focal point it the point which the viewer is meant to focus on. In this sig, you could accomplish that by adding more lighting and blending around the render. Text is also a bit weak here man. Keep at it.
The whit stock covering everything has to go imo. Text could be better. The whole thing looks a bit LQ as well. I reckon scrap this one, and try again mate.
In my opinion that was a bit harsh. Maybe it's cause it's Weezy F, but anyways, I think there are some good ideas. Just make the sig less wide, and watch the contrast. I think you've blended and used stock pretty well here. But yeah, just watch the contrast and size mate.
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